"I think what you need to do is just be there for your Mom," Naoki told Tyra as he was squeezing a lime for a fresh margarita. "You need to think of something you can do with her. Like write a song. Or maybe you and your sister could take a road trip with her."
Tyra sighed. She was too hot even in her bra and slip pants. She might as well get naked. The AC was blasting, but she felt as if she could melt. There was no way she was going anywhere with her sick pregnant sister.
"I mean, I wouldn't mind if we had a kid, but you know, you might not be up for that." He shrugged. His back turned to her in the open kitchen.
She just wished he'd hurry up with the drink, but no, he had to shake it like a professional before he would pour it over a bed of ice.
Tyra blew a breath. Was he serious?
"What has gotten into you?"
"I guess I love you." He teased. "It's just everyone's got a kid."
"That is not true. Just your brother and, well, you know, Millie."
He handed her the salty and tangy drink. She wished he'd made it sweeter, but he knew where to cut calories. "You'd really want to be a dad?"
He cracked up, a bit giddy, but then he nodded. "If my brother can do it, I know I'd be a much better dad."
Now Tyra laughed with a smile. "Millie is so miserable. She can only keep Dr. Pepper down. I don't know what's wrong with that girl."
"Maybe, we should ask your parents over for dinner."
"But, then we'd have to ask your parents too?" Tyra shot him a look.
"Not necessarily, we could just ask them, some other time." Naoki had accepted Jo to be his new stepdad. After all, he was handy when it came to car troubles.
"Oh, God, I just thought if we were here and they were there, it would be, far enough away." She closed her eyes. She was tired. She just wanted to sip her drink and ask for another, but Naoki was already making the stirfry.
"We need to be there for them," he said, looking back at her as he scooped up the slices of chicken and veg while they browned. "I love your mom. I want her to feel happy. She needs us."
Tyra guessed he was right, but when was the last time she told her mother that she loved her?
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DeleteI love seeing them, again. Keep writing.
ReplyDeleteNaoki sounds like a really nice guy.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much. Most of his life it's just been him and his mother. They are now part of the family she left behind when she divorced.
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ReplyDeleteestupendo capítulo, me encantan los reencuentros
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Naoki sounds such kind and caring person and Tyra seems little irresponsible
ReplyDeleteHope they complete each other with their good and bad
Oh, it's complicated, but I think he's a good influence.
DeleteTemos que dizer todos os dias a nossa mãe que a amamos, Ellie bjs.
ReplyDeleteWe have to tell our mom every day that we love her, Ellie bjs.
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Genial fragmento. Te mando un beso.
ReplyDeleteVery interesting 😊
ReplyDeleteHe's right, it's good to take care of your mother sometimes, mothers deserve that. :)
ReplyDeleteNaoki is such an interesting character here. On one hand, he’s being so sweet and supportive, wanting to be there for Tyra’s mom and casually dropping that he wants to be a dad (and that jab about being a better dad than his brother cracked me up!). But on the other hand, you can totally feel Tyra's overwhelm. She’s dealing with a sick, pregnant sister, a mother who needs her, and the weight of realizing she can't even remember the last time she told her mom she loved her. That final line hit so deep. It's such a heavy, relatable moment of daughter-guilt.
ReplyDeleteThe dialogue flows so naturally, like eavesdropping on a real couple in their kitchen. I’m so curious about where this is heading. Is this snippet part of a larger short story or a novel you're currently working on? I would love to know what happens next with Tyra and Naoki!
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DeleteSuch great writing, thanks for sharing Ellie.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much! I appreciate your comment and thank you so much for reading.
DeleteAnyone who says, "I am this way and I won't change", is a fool. We live to learn and correct our mistakes.
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Właśnie skończyłam oglądać serial gdzie był uroczy facet imieniem Naoki ♥️ Ach jak ja uwielbiam to imię. Fajnie że go tak nazwałas. Wyczuwam chemię między tą parką. Chyba coś jest na rzeczy. Czekam jak to się rozwinie. Tęskniłam za twoimi opowieściami. Pozdrawiam najserdeczniej z Krakowa
ReplyDeleteGreat chapter, as always it's a pleasure to read you, greetings
ReplyDeleteOh so interesting dinamic this duo
ReplyDeleteIt's so important to tell our mother that we love her ❤️ I'm a mother and I know how happy those words make me.
ReplyDeleteThey sound miss matched. He's seems to care more about her family than she does. People should really both want children before they go down that road. You come up with names I've never heard of for your characters.
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